This week we did a writing test.
We had to write an explanation to explain three ways to fix a problem with the environment.
I am really excited, because I have gone up from 4B to 5A!
I was expecting to get a 3A when I first shared it with the class, because I realised I has accidentally written an argument instead of an explanation. Anyway, here it is and I hope you enjoy it!
Name: Depla
Explanation Writing - Term 4
Prompt: - - Write to describe one environmental problem and explain what people do to reduce its impact on the planet.
Think about:
- What your reader needs to know about the topic
- How you are going to introduce the topic
- The order of your ideas and how you link them
- What to include in your summary
Remember to:
- Choose your words carefully
- Take care with your spelling, punctuation, and sentences
- Edit - add or delete words or sentences to improve your work
Start Writing Here:
Our Hot, Hot Planet
What would you do if you woke up and your city had turned into a desert? Okay maybe global warming doesn’t happen overnight. Global warming is the rising of our air temperature. It does happen naturally, but we are making it speed up. Global warming is also melting the north and south pole. Where will Santa live after we melt the ice? I am going to give you three ways to prevent our planet becoming another hot sun.
When I said that global warming was melting the ice, you would probably think I am worried for the animals. Yes, there is that, but I am also worried about us. Did you know Antarctica holds over 90 percent of Earth's freshwater? What does that equal? Your backyard turn into a flooding pool! And, no, it would not be fun to swim in, there would probably be sharks waiting at your doorsteps! One of the major causes of global warming is the overuse of fossil fuels-the fuels we use for our cars. So a great way for you to help us would be to go online and buy yourself an electric car. They don’t use the fossil fuels, they only use electricity.
Did you know that about 40 years ago, the floor would be covered in a thick hail in Winter? We don’t get that anymore, do we? Another major cause of global warming is carbon dioxide. You know, the air we breathe out? Anyway, there is only one way to fix this. What do you know that absorbs carbon dioxide, and spits out oxygen? Our good old trees! So if you own a big smoke factory, don’t forget to bring those saplings!
Guess what! Did you know for the last however long china has been taking our rubbish? Well they’ve stopped taking it now! Pollution is another big cause of global warming. And you wouldn’t want our land to be polluted anyway, would you? So what can you do to help? Well just do the simple things and slowly build up to the more extreme, like bring your own non-plastic bags to the supermarket instead of using the shops ones. Or, buy products that have not been sitting in plastic all day. Plus, plastic is very unhealthy for US as well!
I hope you have learned something today. And I hope that our planet won't become a rubbish dump. And YOU will choose the destiny of ourhome. Whether it is desert, fireball or a deep underwater ocean.
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